Comment Wall
Nursery Rhymes: The Man in the Moon
Image by Scott Gustafson
Here is a comic for The Cat and the Fiddle!
Comic from Crowbar Comics
Introduction to Overactive Imagination
Hello! My name is Lauren Skaggs, and here is a little history about me! Family My parents live in Oklahoma City, which is where I was born and raised. I have a twin brother; his name is Braden. We look absolutely nothing alike. He is 6'1" to my 5'3" with thick brown hair that makes my strawberry blonde look like toupee. My family has two dogs, Zander and Ginger. Ginger loves to cuddle and hide under blankets when the wind is too loud. Zander likes to pout and steal food off people's plates. (Personal Photo: Zander) (Personal Photo: Ginger) (Personal Video: Ginger Hiding) What I'm About When I was a kid, the very first thing I ever wanted to be was a priest. I liked the songs we would sing at church, the people always bustling around, how everyone seemed to know each other. Unfortunately – or fortunately, depending on how you like to view things – I wasn’t born with the right parts and I eventually moved on to other career ideas.
Hi Lauren! I enjoyed reading your introduction of your storyboard. I look forward to reading other parts of your project. However, was your introduction giving a preview of the Man in the Moon? Is your entire project based off of this nursery rhyme or is this just one that people are familiar with. One suggestion that could help your readers would be to give them a preview of what your storyboard will be about. I know your storyboard is about nursery rhymes, but what are you going to do with them? Are you going to retell classic ones? I've always loved nursery rhymes and reading them, so I am very impressed that you are able to create ones and have them flow and rhyme correctly. I also like the details that you placed into your board with the header pictures and including a background of the pictures you included. This helps the readers know the meaning behind what you are including in your storybook.
ReplyDeleteLauren,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the creativity of you introduction in making it a poem! I also thought that picture you chose was very pretty and set the mood. However, I was wondering the same thing that Julianna was. Will your storybook be about The Man on the Moon specifically? Or will he be telling stories that he has witnessed from high up above. How will you incorporate different nursery rhymes into that? If you are planning on having The Man on the Moon tell stories that he has witnessed, I think it would be neat to include at least one story that involves him telling a story about himself. (you kind of did this in the intro but in more detail). It would be a great way to end the storybook and you could tie it back into the previous stories you have told! I'm interested to see where you go with this, great work!
Hi Lauren!
ReplyDeleteWow! I loved the creativity of your introduction! I have a difficult time writing poetry so I was very impressed! The image seems perfect for the mood and tone of your intro. So like many others, what is the direction of your story? Is the man on the moon someone who watches over everyone and knows if they did right or wrong? Or is he a regular person who somehow got stuck on the moon? Either way, it would be awesome to get some background information on the man before diving into his stories. This would help the reader become familiar with the man as well as the reason he is telling these stories. Anyways, great work and I look forward to reading these in the future!
Hi Lauren!
ReplyDeleteI loved your introduction! Both the use of a poem and the layout of your introduction page are so creative and unique, and both set a distinct tone for your storybook! I especially appreciated the way you explored how the Man in the Moon is a watcher of sorts, who sees all that goes on in the world below. This perspective gives you so many options in terms of what stories you can tell, and like previous commenters, I'm curious to see where you're going to go with it! Based on the title of your site, I'm guessing it will be to do with nursery rhymes, but it would be nice to have a little bit more of an idea of what I'm getting into. At the same time, I can appreciate a bit of mystery, so I think that as long as the first story clearly establishes what you'll be doing with the site, the introduction is fine as is, especially the poem! I'm excited to see what comes next!
Hey Lauren!
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, the way your storybook is set up is really nice. I like how in all of the pages, you separate the page into halves and it makes it easier to read and more appealing to the eye! I like how your Introduction is a poem; it really distinguishes and makes your storybook different than all the others! I also like how you are going to use the "Man in the Moon" is our narrator for the rest of the stories because he can offer such a unique perspective. I also like how "The Moon's Origin" gives the audience a brief background of the moon and how it came to be because that is something I don't really know that much about! I really like how in both your Author's Notes you explain what is happening in detail in each story because it really does help the audience when reading these stories. You also give a little background of the differences of the nursery rhyme which is very helpful because it shows you have done your research and know what you are talking about! Good job and I can't wait to read more!
Howdy Lauren! Your site is really well put together and seems like it's built to be helpful for the rest of us! I especially like that the footer includes both the author's note and a link to this comment wall. Telling your stories in verse was a really bold choice that I think has paid off. Especially in the first poem after your introduction, "The Birth of the Moon", it adds a mythological quality to the scientific explanation of the moon's origins. When you consider that myths are there to explain the world around us, tying those themes into modern scientific understanding was a great idea.
ReplyDeleteAs a heads-up, I noticed that it looks like you have placeholder text for the fourth line of "Selene". Overall, I'm loving what looks to be a well-done and creative storybook, and I'm excited to learn more about the narrator. I hope we get some more background about him in one of the next poems!
Thanks for the heads-up! I read your comment a while back but told myself I'd get around the fixing that and then forgot! I really appreciate you putting the heads-up in the comment because it reminded me!
DeleteHey Lauren!
ReplyDeleteI just want to begin by saying that I really wish I was as creative as you are. When I read your introduction, before even taking a glimpse at your story, I knew it was going to be great. The idea that you incorporated a poem as your introduction and developed a narrator, I think is super great! It is really creative to have him named 'The Man in the Moon' so he can see far more than we can. I have limited knowledge in poetry so I am not the best to make recommendations, but I think the language you used was so descriptive and perfect for the tone of your storybook. The photos that you used were really unique and they really brought your storybook to life. The format of your storybook makes it easy-accessible and easy to read, and the language is not too fancy or unique to where it prevents the reader from understanding the stories. Honestly, I don't really have any big critiques to make at this point. I think you are doing a great job!
Hi Lauren, I am in the Indian Epics class this semester and really enjoyed reading your project! You are the first person I have seen doing a poetry project so I thought that was very creative and original. I also think you have a great website layout, it is the best I have seen. It is easy to navigate and I like how you put the author's note at the bottom with a different color background and have an image in the sidebar so that it does not distract from the poetry. I also appreciated the links in the author's note, like the link to a Rotten Tomatoes review. It seems like your project is really going well and that you have it worked out what you will be doing with it for the rest of the semester. I am excited to see that you add next to this project!
ReplyDeleteHey Lauren, this is my first time visiting your storybook and I am very impressed. I like how on your homepage you have a table of contents as well as an author's note. This is much more than my website has, I may look into adding some more things to my homepage to making it stand out more. The poetry you have written is truly awesome. I would never be able to do it, but you are truly killing it with all of the different poems. I really enjoy how you are explaining where the nursery rhymes came from and how the stories in them came to be. Nursery rhymes are known all over the world and I always sang them growing up but I have never taken the time to research about where they were made up or even why. I will definitely be visiting your page soon. Overall really great job, I love your creativity within the storybook and the poems!
ReplyDeleteHello Lauren, I am very impressed by the decision to go for poetry here, that is a daunting task for just one poem, let alone creating a whole storybook about it. One note on formatting, the two columns approach is good for poetry, but I am curious if there is some way to add a vertical line for some sort of visual break between the two columns. Your pictures do a good job at helping this, but in my opinion that visual break would make it obvious to the reader from the beginning. Your homepage formatting was great, it gave all the information I needed to be able to jump right into your project despite not being in Myth-Folklore. Your language was very elevated throughout the nursery rhymes, making them something that is not too simplistic for adults, a common pitfall for nursery rhymes but one your work easily clears. Great work so far, and I look forward to reading more from you in the future.
ReplyDeleteHey Lauren! I Really enjoyed your introduction! It was very creative and fresh! Poetry is not a similar subject for me so i have utmost respect for you. Especially since you decided to make your storybook about poetry. That sounds very hard difficult and i admire you for taking such a task. I also really liked your authors note's since it is very descriptive and even beginners like me have no problem getting the original story. images you used on your website is also very unique and it fits the poetry theme of your storybook very well. Overall, excellent job and keep up the good work! I am looking forward to read more stories from you!
ReplyDeleteHey Lauren! Your site very much impressed me -- I could never tell poetry, that's for sure. Your formatting makes your stories easy to read and different to look at compared to other storybooks. I haven't seen another poetry subject, so you're very unique. Great job explaining your motives in your author's notes, as I hadn't read the originals before! Additionally, I'm a fan of the images throughout your stories. Sometimes it breaks stories up, but in your case with 2 columns, I think they work well to flow the story from one column to the next. Your writing is very simple, which makes it fun to follow. One idea I could give is utilizing transition sentences in each story that foreshadow or explain what the next will be about. Sometimes, this makes us have suspense as readers and look forward to the next addition to the storybook! Great job and good luck in the future!
ReplyDeleteThis comment has been removed by the author.
ReplyDeleteHey Lauren! I absolutely love your project! It is absolutely amazing. I can tell that you have really put in a lot of effort into this website and made it really your own. Your poetry is absolutely beautiful as well. I think making your stories into poetry verse was a brilliant idea. I am not that talented with writing poetry so I didn't even think of doing something like this. I think it is a pretty unique idea for this project. I really liked how you used the pictures to break up the poetry into two columns. It makes the stories look less daunting to the readers than if it was just one column all the way down. I also really liked all the pictures you have chosen. They add to the imagery of the stories and are really interesting. I really love your work and I hope I get the chance to come back and read more of your work.
ReplyDeleteHey Lauren! I really loved doing this assignment this week because it allowed me to read some things from the students in the Myth-Folklore class. This was a great opportunity and I look forward to doing it again soon! Your website is very unique and interesting. I love how you have chosen to do your project over nursery rhymes. Honestly, looking through your website was so soothing. Reading these nursery rhymes and how you have re-done them makes me think about my childhood and how my mother would make up her own words to children’s songs. Also, I really like how you have included the true meaning of these songs and talked about how they are a part of a larger story and meaning. I think that this is important to keep in mind and it is always good to learn something new. Thank you so much for sharing both your website and this information. Nice to meet you!
ReplyDeleteHello again Lauren!
ReplyDeleteI loved reading the new page on your website. You really have a talent for writing! I love the title and home page of your site. It reminds me of that old french movie A Trip to the Moon. If you have never seen it, you should really watch it! The entire movie is on YouTube and it is only about twelve minutes long. It may inspire you for more ways to design your stories. I really love the pictures you added to the new story, as well. However, you may want to remove one or two, as the page looks a little busy right now. Other than that, seriously fantastic work!
Hi, Lauren!
ReplyDeleteI want to start by saying your storybook is one of my favorites. Your creativity is unmatched and I truly admire your style of writing! You made these stories come to life with such a great use of detail and description. I also love your explanation behind everything. For example, how the moon sees everything. Everything ties together so well, and your page is so easy to navigate through. The images are so cool, and the design in general is amazing!
Great job, Lauren. I am definitely impressed and I can't wait to read more!
Hi, Lauren!
ReplyDeleteI have no idea how it has taken me so long to make it to your Storybook project, but I am so glad that I did before class ends! I clicked into your site before realizing that it belonged to you, and was eager to learn who had written their entire project as poetry. Now that I know it is yours, I am not at all surprised!
Your writing is excellent, and the idea of recounting these nursery rhymes from the perspective of the man in the moon is so creative!
You did a great job of collecting a myriad of photos for your site, which is so visually appealing! For the most part, I liked the two column view on you pages, but at times, the set-up made it difficult to determine what to read next. Nevertheless, I have only goo things to say about your work. Great job!